That was pretty good!
I liked the chara syle a lot, they were drawn really creatively, some of the backgrounds were awesome, for example the one in the scene where they walk outside in the rain. Another thing that i liked was how the car rode into the building, was done very nicely too. Voices were over avarage, but, in my opion you should try to make your scenes a little shorter and show different angles. That's something you have to practice, it's my biggest mistake, as well! so keep it up! Peace!